SGA: Fake Birds and Real Holidays

[xparrot]

I sga_flashfic'ed again, this time for the Family challenge. Considering I didn't really know where this was going when it started - a couple of scenes in mind, that was it - I quite like how it turned out. It's sweet bordering on insulin shock, but there's some melancholy, too. And TEAM. Very much TEAM.

Also it was meant to be a couple thousand words at most. Er. Oops. Again.

SGA: Fake Birds and Real Holidays {~8,300 words}
PG, post-season 4 speculation, fluff, angst
The team descends on the Miller household. (No turkeys were harmed in the making of this story. Much to Rodney and Ronon's disappointment.)

Comments

[stitcher2ficcer.livejournal.com]

Awwww. I'm sure you knew while you were writing this that I'd love it. Very teamy teaminess and very our family kind of familyness. How could you go wrong? ("annoyingly Rockwellian" indeed!) I particularly liked the dish soap and sprayer fight between Ronon and Rodney while doing dishes. Also loved Rodney's smirking pride that his niece's genius genes weren't too diluted by the English major's. The combination of humor, sugar, and melancholy was just right. Many very nice details. Very sweet and believable... although the thought of Teyla losing her baby makes me very sad. I agree that it's hard to see a place for an infant and child on Atlantis... but I so love the idea of the whole team being her son's parents. And I REALLY would love to see John and Ronon and Rodney with a baby.

A couple small editing nitpics:
When they arrive at the house, "Rodney hefted his backpack and lead the way inside" should be "led the way inside."

"During the dishwater fight, "They were staring at one other in fierce silence" should be "staring at one another," right?

And during the film watching, "John, sunk into the armchair's paisley cushions," is technically okay; but "sunk" is the past form of "sank" and the adjective form is "sunken;" so to my mind "John, sunken into the armchair's cushions,..." would sound better.

The rest? Golden!

[xparrot.livejournal.com]

Glad you enjoyed it! Yeah, I thought you might. And I'd love to see Teyla actually keep her baby, I just don't think it's very likely...

Thanks for the edits, too, I've fixed 'em (except the last one I'm on the fence about; "sunken into" just sounds odd to me.) The others, yeah, hazards of editing at 6AM ^^; (arrrrgh, lead/led is my Achilles' heel, I screw that one up all the time. It's read/read, so why...damn the irregularities of the English tongue!)